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Bucket boy by =masked-racoon:iconmasked-racoon:



                                        Man of metal
                                             With four legs
                                            And magic stick
                                     He runs across the land
                                     Faster than any stream
                                   Stronger than any mountain
                                  Impenetrable and invincible


                                                                            A demon
                                              With a face of snow
                                                                            And a bush on his chin
                                His bones jingling as he runs
                                                                             His second head eats grass
                                     While his first eats people
                                                                              Plant hater and animal hater



A omen
                                        That brought with it death
                                                                                                And the lust for wealth
        The obsession of shiny rocks
                                                                             He brought power
                                                 And the lust for it aswell
He brought destruction to our people


                                                      A crook
                                            He ran from the law
                                             Who hated society
                                           Who robbed the rich
                                            And killed the poor
                                               He hit his wife
                                            And deserved to die



                                                      A hero
                                                      A bloody legend
                                                      This bloke went up to too the english and said
                                                      “You’re bloody kidding me mate? Up you’rse then”
                                                      Sure he wore a bucket
                                                      But I was a dam good idea
                                                      Ned Kelly, you bloody ripp’a
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This was a piece that i wrote for the hell of it
i'm tempted to use this in my literature class to score extra points with my teacher
XD

Please tell me what you think
what works?
what you like?
what doesn't work?
what you don't like?
what i can improve on?
If i should give up on this poetry lark?
XD

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~Caphriel:iconCaphriel: Apr 14, 2008, 7:23:19 AM Mood: Joy
Nice man! Jah bless you!
=masked-racoon:iconmasked-racoon: Apr 14, 2008, 7:33:56 AM
Thanks
=)

anything in particular about it that you liked?

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~Caphriel:iconCaphriel: Apr 14, 2008, 7:39:23 AM
That have a nice form and this is easy for translate for me:D
=masked-racoon:iconmasked-racoon: Apr 14, 2008, 7:42:29 AM
:D
cool

So what is you're mother lanuage then?
you're first tounge?

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4th scholar of retardo (recruiter)
:iconsk3nv0y:-3rd scholar of retardo(War writer)
:iconjackflint:-1st scholar of retardo (rap and poems)
:iconcaptaincabbage:-second scholar of retardo (comedy and serious)
The scholars of Retardo:Master comedy writer
*tyrannusBE:icontyrannusBE: Apr 14, 2008, 7:45:51 AM
I like the way it comes over all destorted.

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We're all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars. --- Oscar Wilde

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Third honorary scholar of retardo, and proud of it!
~Caphriel:iconCaphriel: Apr 14, 2008, 10:13:54 AM
My mother language?? I'm speaking in polish(mother language), russian and japanese(study). My english is very bad. I have learned(???) some word when I'm listening Bob Marley and others artists who talking in english.
~kmwright:iconkmwright: Apr 14, 2008, 1:39:27 PM
These poems are pretty good. Just make sure you don't put your feelings in there so obvious. make your readers curious on what you are trying to say.
~captaincabbage:iconcaptaincabbage: Apr 14, 2008, 2:39:30 PM
cool. really cool.

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All I want in my life is to make people content.

Homer Simpson: "stupid like a FOX!!!"
~imokyoureok:iconimokyoureok: Apr 14, 2008, 6:42:24 PM
who robbed the rich
and killed the poo

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Smile...it confuses people (if those people are retards). Smiling is actually supposed to communicate you're feeling happy. lolololololo
=masked-racoon:iconmasked-racoon: Apr 14, 2008, 11:44:38 PM
Took you guys long enough to find that!:shakefist:

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4th scholar of retardo (recruiter)
:iconsk3nv0y:-3rd scholar of retardo(War writer)
:iconjackflint:-1st scholar of retardo (rap and poems)
:iconcaptaincabbage:-second scholar of retardo (comedy and serious)
The scholars of Retardo:Master comedy writer